Kidnap essay

I'm not sure how many grammatical errors there are in the essay that I wrote...maybe tons.
Because it wasn't marked! I wrote this essay during Sec 4 as a revision for my O's.

STORY:

The cold and dark room was filled with danger and threat. "Call your parents now!" thundered the authorative man with a menacing threat in his voice. A squemish whimper arose from a dark corner, "o-okay" stammered the 14 year old kid.

There was a horrifying glare under the man's bushy eyebrows. He reeked of alcohol and cigars. A sinister laugh came about when the parents of the child agreed to the ransom.

The room looked bleak and uninviting, just like the grim expression of a doctor.

It had been three days since I was captured by three muscular men after school. Beads of sweat dotted my forehead when I saw the glistening blade used to threaten my safety. Three days, for three days I was locked up in a room. Where am I? I questioned myself. Will they even let me go after they receive the ransom? Impossible, they are brutal and cold-blooded beings. Filled with determination, I decided to escape from the fangs of the kidnappers.

I cast fleeting glances outside the window and around the room. To my excitement, there was not a single soul around the area. "The security is loose, this is my chance!" I murmured softly. I grabbed a piece of broken glass instantly on the floor and cut the rope tying my hands and legs. That instant, I was free.

I headed towards the window and cautiously crawl out of the abandoned hut. To my horror, a man with a great mop of grey hair and tatooed arm stood outside talking on the phone. He must be one of the accomplices. My mind plunged into a whirlpool of chaos. I scrambled frantically on the floor and sprint towards the bush. I covered my mouth with my sweaty palm, struggling to repress my teeming fear.

Luckily, I was not spotted by the kidnappers. My heart pounded as I crawled towards the woods. I lumbered across the woods carelessly and many a times fell over falling branches. But that did not stop me from running away. "I'm reaching..." I breathed heavily.

"Hey you! Stop there!" a sudden sound came from behind. I stiffened at the voice. Expecting that it was the kidnapper, I continued running. I felt my heart coming out of my mouth as the kidnapper persistently chase after me. It was a wild-goose chase. I manage to hide from the kidnapper by hiding among the thick bushes in the dense wood. I held my breathe, stood still as sweat trickle down my face. As I scrutinized the area, there was no sight of the kidnapper.

"Oh no, something must be wrong" I whispered. A man appeared behind me, showing a conspiratorial smile revealing his deadly fangs. "Are you looking for me?" he hissed. The kidnapper was just two feet behind me, I knew I was doomed. I was seized with fear as courage in me vamoosed.

Suddenly, a loud thud pierced the silent air. The man fell onto the hard ground, blood oozing out from his stomach like thick red liquid. The man's eye was wide-opened, revealing a horrifying expression. I was rendered speechless and staggered backwards, shaken by the sight of a dead man. The kidnapper was shot.

To my surprise, the police had discovered the kidnapper's nest and killed the kidnapper just in time during the struggle. I crumbled in front of the corpse, still horrified by the scene. Tears start rolling down my bruised cheeks as I was finally safe.

The blue uniformed savior held me up and said with a soothing and comforting voice, "don't worry, it's all over now".